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Wannabe skateboard

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Ugh. For the life of me I could not get this to work the way I wanted it to OTL Constructive critiques welcome and appreciated QuQ/

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p.s. sorry if I dont get to answering your comments and questions Q__Q But I read them all, I promise! ;u;;

Frame count: 33; 16fps
Work time: 4 hours
Tools: AzDrawing2
Image size
500x389px 251.68 KB
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

The animation is quite amazing actually. I'm not better than you but I think I can give you some advice.

I think the animation looks a bit wobbly and choppy. It's not really choppy, it's still smooth but if you want to make it perfect then you might need to put more in-between frames. You have a perfect body shape, it's the one who prevents the breakdown of the 'awesomeness'.

The skateboard is one of the things that needs work, I mean like, it changes it shape every frame. You might need to work on that. The girl runs and jumps a bit slow. The skateboard was tossed and flipped over, therefore the skateboard has a great speed (I think), that means the girl has to run a bit fast too.

As I've observed, I think there are frames in this animation which is blank. It's because somewhere near the middle, the animation turns blank in a second. This could destroy the interest of the watchers.

To Make It Short, You Need To Fix:
Chopiness
Wobbles
Blank Frames
Double Framing
Speed

About the originality, I think I've seen this in the anime "Detective Conan".
My favorite XD
Your technique is quite good, you just need a bit of fixing.
The total impact would be 3.5/5 stars.

I hope this helps you, good luck improving my friend.