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Submitted: October 12, 2012
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Wannabe skateboardby *Nachooz

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Ugh. For the life of me I could not get this to work the way I wanted it to OTL Constructive critiques welcome and appreciated QuQ/

_{p.s. sorry if I dont get to answering your comments and questions Q__Q But I read them all, I promise! ;u;;}

Frame count: 33; 16fps
Work time: 4 hours
Tools: AzDrawing2

Critique by ~NinjaFordz Oct 16, 2012, 5:05:17 AM

The animation is quite amazing actually. I'm not better than you but I think I can give you some advice.

I think the animation looks a bit wobbly and choppy. It's not really choppy, it's still smooth but if you want to make it perfect then you might need to put more in-between frames. You have a perfect body shape, it's the one who prevents the breakdown of the 'awesomeness'.

The skateboard is one of the things that needs work, I mean like, it changes it shape every frame. You might need to work on that. The girl runs and jumps a bit slow. The skateboard was tossed and flipped over, therefore the skateboard has a great speed (I think), that means the girl has to run a bit fast too.

As I've observed, I think there are frames in this animation which is blank. It's because somewhere near the middle, the animation turns blank in a second. This could destroy the interest of the watchers.

To Make It Short, You Need To Fix:
Chopiness
Wobbles
Blank Frames
Double Framing
Speed

About the originality, I think I've seen this in the anime "Detective Conan".
My favorite XD
Your technique is quite good, you just need a bit of fixing.
The total impact would be 3.5/5 stars.

I hope this helps you, good luck improving my friend.

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Critique by *Passionateshadow Oct 12, 2012, 10:00:53 PM

This seems to be an overall very energetic animation. The eyes seem to pop open so suddenly however it strikes me as a bit odd to see them pop open so quickly near the end there. The hair movement is gorgeous and flows nicely except from one frame where her hair length seems to lose it's constancy for about one frame; Also her bangs appear to transition from a strange edged cut to a shaggy/spiky cute in several frames. Likewise during the jump her feet seem to just shrink in perspective a bit too much mid jump. The only thing I could think of there would be to add a few blur frames to make the transition of perspective a bit smoother. Mid jump her bow's size consistency seems to get larger than it's usual proportions. The skirt of the dress and the arm movements are very well done so are the first few steps of the character. The skate board seems to also disappear for a fraction of a moment. Overall I'd say this is still a good animation. Of coarse it could be refined but your key frames definitely tell the story well. I'm looking forward to seeing more animations done by you and hope to encourage you to keep up the good work!

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~LousCharacters Apr 29, 2013 Hobbyist

your animations is awesome

~Ex-Trident Mar 23, 2013 Hobbyist General Artist

nice animation!. where can i find azdrawing2? been searching but it seems to be taken down somewhat

~RosyRose1 Jan 18, 2013

love itt X3

~moemoemoefun Dec 3, 2012 General Artist

YOU ARE THE GOD or GODDESS OF ANIMATIONS

~Sleepinnggirl Nov 25, 2012

what program you use?

OO It's really cool

~MasterArtPad Nov 8, 2012 Hobbyist Filmographer

very smooth animation, what are you using to aimate?

~coolmonkeyd Oct 26, 2012 Student Filmographer

hey whats Azdrawing and why do you use it ?

~izzyfizzy23 Oct 22, 2012 Hobbyist Traditional Artist

eeh sketchy O.O but i like, can u finish? i'd really like 2 c a finished product

~THETACOGRL Oct 19, 2012 Hobbyist Artist

awsnomness

*ric-c Oct 18, 2012 Hobbyist Filmographer

Good work, it's nice and fluid, the hair and clothes seem to move with the body. If you can keep certain things consistent such as keep the face and skateboard and possibly add more in-betweens this will be even better.

I notice she is running on a surface slightly higher than where the skateboard is and it seems she is running in front of the skateboard. Is that intentional?

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